Hi I have two essays that are due tomorrow in the afternoon. The essays need ONLY editing.
Essay 2 Draft 2 (E2D3) The first prompt for the essay is:
Write an essay that explores the concept of home, in particular the ideologies, attitudes and values attached to a specific home space.
Your paper should be approximately 4-5 pages, typed, double-spaced, in 12-point font, minimum of three credible sources, and in MLA format.
Essay 3 Draft 2 (E3D2) The second prompt is:
In this essay you will focus on one of the themes addressed in One Amazing Thing by Chitra Divakaruni. For this essay, you will develop and support an argument about the theme (Marriage and Culture, the Immigrant Experience, Ethnic Discrimination, and Education and Culture) you have explored with your group.
Your paper should be approximately 4-5pages, typed, double-spaced, in 12-point Times New Roman font, and in MLA format. You must also use at least four credible outside sources to your argument.
Why Is There Home?
In each spot on earth people through the past until the present have places to live in and get their sustenance from. These places are called homes. People in this life have different views and perspectives on homes so homes are defined differently based on the person. Although some may argue that homes are places where people relax and get their sustenance, home is the origin where we formalize our values and manners because it the only place that we own. This is not very clear, as I am not sure what you asserting. Many people do not own their homes. Does the physical space create your values?
Home is not just a place to live. It is a place where we receive our education, values, and manners. Homes are the places that shape us to be who we are during our life. In addition, our personalities have been affected by homes. Also, the cultures, traditions, and beliefs that we receive from the home that we live in would remain with us until we leave this life. However, we could get all of those things from one place, which is home; individuals whom live with us are the one who give it to us. It sounds like you are arguing that your definition of home is family. This should be in your first paragraph (develop introduction and thesis statement). What type of family? Are you arguing that in your country it is more common to live with extended family members? Is this a good thing…why? Looking later in your essay, it seems that you are really discussing homes in Saudi Arabia. Why don’t you make this the focus of your essay, but you need to use three credible sources.
Family is the one or group of people whom are responsible for our traditions and values. Without a family we cannot live the same life that we live now, because since our childhood they were planting the values and ethics that we gained now. Family is a blessing that we have to take care of for the rest of our lives. However, family is not just the parents and siblings. Family is each person whom we lived and grew up with. So family is home because we received everything that we know now from the people who lived in that place, which called home.
Since we defined home as the family that we have. Each person in this life has the right to own a home. In order to have a family you have to have a home. Home and family are two things that tight to each other so that means they are connected. Homes should be places that no one can control but the owner. Homes are places to express our feelings, believes, and to be who we are with our family. Moreover, homes are the safest place for the people whom live in it so what happens when you lose the sense of trust on something? You will not take your comfort in that place whatever happens. No one in this life has the right to enter a home and control it for any reason.
In general, there are many things that should be in home to make it suitable for the family whom live in it. For example, each person in the family must have an enough space to make him or her comfortable. Another thing is there should be some things that represent the past of each person. For example, pictures, childhood games, or a place where children were spending there time playing. Also, there should be supplies that the family believes. For example, for religion purposes Muslims must pray five times a day so they have to have a place to pray in, although there are mosques outside homes. And for cultural reasons Saudis have to have a dining room that they can sit on the floor and eat.
No doubt, the definition of home varies from people’s perspective from country to another. As a person who lived in Saudi Arabia and living in the United States I saw many differences in homes between Saudi Arabia and United States. In Saudi Arabia the homes are bigger and have more spaces compared to the United States. A member is required to be in home with the family until he or she gets married, and even if he or she wants to stay after marrying at the same home that they lived in they are welcomed. For example, Suzan Zawawi a Saudi wife who is living with her family in law. Says (I live in a complex in the first floor, and my brother in law lives in the second floor with his wife. Also, my father in law lives in the house that next to us). That means there are group of people even after marrying they still live together at the same house. In the United States the situation is different most members are welcomed to be at home until the age of 18 then the member from his self or herself starts thinking of moving to another place to live. However, in Saudi Arabia it is hard to find an affordable place to live in beside the house you live in, the opportunities are much less than the United States. In Saudi Arabia an apartment costs more than third of your monthly income and sometimes the half. On the other hand in the United States its costs less. In Saudi Arabia usually the person does not own home until he or she gets married and the home is preferred to be near the family members work and school. But due to financial problems people does not think about this thing as a priority in these days. In the United States the supply and demands are much more higher so you have better chance to find a good place near what you want.
It is right that there are many people whom believe that our homes are just to relax and to do nothing; we cannot reject them because they grew up with lack of family association. Moreover, having a lack of understanding what does home mean is really serious problem that we need to take care of. Educating is not an impossible thing to do, we just need to target the people whom do not understand the concept of home is and teach them in good way that satisfies them.
In conclusion, homes are not just places to get our relaxation and daily needs from. Homes are places that we gain our traditions, values, and manners from. Also, we receive our education from the individuals whom we lived with. There are many differences based on people on how to describe what home means. In addition, we live in a huge world that contains many cultures that we almost cannot count; this thing leads to the diversity of the current cultures.
Works cited
Muslim video, “Saudi wife shows us into her home Part1”, Suzan Zawawi. 7 Oct. 2010.
video. 19 March 2013.
I am attaching my comments from the first draft. I am not seeing much revision to the introduction, on which I commented extensively.
Arranged marriages
What is marriage? Marriage is a connection between a male and a female to help each other in life, work, and happiness. Also, marriage is to breed humankind. A couple would be together for the rest of their lives, so when choosing your life partner you should be very careful. In order to get married, there are different ways based on the cultures that the person grew up in. For example, Muslims countries the most common way of marriage is the arranged marriage, the western countries the most common marriage is the love marriage. Moreover, there is the forced marriage, which is the least common marriage and it occur in Asian countries especially Muslim countries, and this thing does not have to do with religion, but because of the cultures and traditions. Although many people in western countries believe love is an important value to have in marriage, love is the main reason why people choose to get married, there are other factors that should be taken into consideration such beliefs, traditions, and values. Therefore this would lead to lower divorce rate and give the couples time to know each other.
Arranged marriage occurs under the parent’s perspectives. Since the parents know their son/daughter they can easily choose the life partner for him/her. Parents grew their children based on what they believe; this plant parent would harvest it when the children grow up. However, arranged marriage does not happen until the couple agrees. They can easily see each other once before marrying, and can talk to each other
Parents know how did their children raised and what does he/she prefers so choosing the right life partner is not hard to them. Also, the male have the right to give his specification on the female that he would marry, and the female has the right agree or refuse the male.
There are many benefits of the arranged marriage for example, the male and the female has the right to see each other, and to talk about what do they like and dislike. By those two benefits the couple have the chance to know each other more.
In Saudi Arabia the arranged marriage has two main steps to get married. The first one is called “Milkah”, Milkah is when a couple be officially married but they are still do not live together. In this step the couple have the right to go out together and no one can tell them anything. For example, they can meet in the female home and sit together to talk about their future. This step does not have a specific period of time; it depends on the couple. If this step had been completed and everything between the couple flows in a good shape they proceed to the next step. The second step called “Zwaj” Which means wedding, the wedding happens after the Milkah and everything for the marriage must been set up during the Milkah period. The couple now can live together and the first thing they do is the honeymoon.
However, arranged marriage in Saudi Arabia must meet requirements such as, religion, traditions, and values. Interfaith marriages does not occur in Saudi Arabia because the Islam, which is the only religion practiced in the country, prohibits this thing. Interfaith marriages occur in the United States and have a big percentage. According to Stanley Fish a professor at Florida International University who writes in The New York Times Riley’s research showed that interfaith marriages rate in the United States is 42 percent.
That means the couples get married with different religion, nowadays couples in western countries such as America do not consider religion in marriage.
Works Cited
Fish, Stanley. “Marrying Out of the Faith.” The New York times. Web. 16 April 2013.
Flanigan, Santana. “Arranged Marriages, Matchmakers, and Dowries in India”
Postcolonial Studies @ Emory
. Fall 2000. Edited Oct 2012. Web. 24 Apr 2013.
Prof Comments. Please consider it.
You must incorporate research (not just what you think). Also think how you can relate this to One Amazing Thing. Why do you think Jiang’s marriage was successful? Why do think Uma’s parents want her to marry an Indian man?
What is marriage? Marriage is a connection between a male and a female to help each other in life, work, and happiness—Is marriage just between a man and woman?. Also, marriage is to breed humankind—Aren’t there people who are married who choose to not have children or are unable to have children?. A couple would be together for the rest of their lives—are they always together for the rest of their lives?, so when choosing your life partner you should be very careful. In order to get married, there are different ways based on the cultures that the person grew up in. For example, Muslims countries the most common way of marriage is the arranged marriage, whereas in the western countries the most common marriage is the love marriage. Moreover, there is the forced marriage, which is the least common marriage and it occur in Asian countries especially Muslim countries, and this thing does not have to do with religion, but because of the cultures and traditions.—Do you need to add this? Although many people in the west believe love is an important value to have in marriage, love is not the most important factor in a marriage. Arranged marriages have lower divorce rates because the relationships are based on the parents believe, tradition, and value. Therefore couples have less to argue about.
Indent–Arranged marriage occurs under the parent’s perspectives—what do you mean?. Since the parents know their son/daughter they can easily choose the life partner for him/her. Parents grew their children based on what they believe; this plant parent would harvest it when the children grow up. However, arranged marriage does not happen until the couple agrees. They can easily see each other once before marrying, and can talk to each other—Support?
Parents know how did their children raised and what does he/she prefers so choosing the right life partner is not hard to them. Also, the male have the right to give his specification on the female that he would marry, and the female has the right agree or refuse the male. –Support?
There are many benefits of the arranged marriage for example, the male and the female has the right to see each other, and to talk about what do they like and dislike. By those two benefits the couple have the chance to know each other more.—Support?
In Saudi Arabia the arranged marriage has two main steps to get married. The first one is called “Milkah”, Milkah is when a couple be officially married but they are still do not live together. In this step the couple have the right to go out together and no one can tell them anything—what do you mean?. For example, they can meet in the female home and sit together to talk about their future. This step does not have a specific period of time; it depends on the couple. If this step had been completed and everything between the couple flows in a good shape they proceed to the next step—what if things don’t go well? I thought you said they were married. Support?. The second step called “Zwaj” Which means marriage, the marriage happen after the Milkah and everything for the marriage must been set up during the Milkah period. The couple now can live together and the first thing they do is the honeymoon. How does Milkah affect a woman’s virtue?
However, arranged marriage in Saudi Arabia must meet requirements such as, religion, traditions, and values. Interfaith marriages does not occur in Saudi Arabia because the Islam, which is the only religion practiced in the country, prohibits this thing. Interfaith marriages occur in the United States and have a big percentage. According to Stanley Fish a professor at Florida International University who writes in The New York Times Riley’s research showed that interfaith marriages rate in the United States is 42 percent.
